tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post7871912969111039356..comments2024-03-12T21:24:23.240-04:00Comments on Emily Bryan Romance: Red Pencil Thursday with Saranna DeWyldeEmilyBryanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03542349086762747179noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-53878231677198955582010-05-31T06:41:12.438-04:002010-05-31T06:41:12.438-04:00Pat--You comment is why "Be Clear" is my...Pat--You comment is why "Be Clear" is my writing Prime Directive. Every reader brings their own frame of reference to a story. As writers, we need to make sure we hit the right hotbuttons so our readers are on board with our fictive dream from word one.EmilyBryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03542349086762747179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-13439037781501096022010-05-31T00:13:58.124-04:002010-05-31T00:13:58.124-04:00I was a bit slow on the uptake here. Probably bec...I was a bit slow on the uptake here. Probably because I'm falling asleep at the computer. <br />Eternal Knight didn't tip me off that we were dealing with paranormal. My mindset was Templar Knight in England after the Crusades. I was OK, but wondering how a South American ceremonial knife got into the mix. A Glock in the chest? I think I need to start over and readjust my mindset.<br />None of that would be a problem if I had the book in hand. I would know I am reading a paranormal not an historical. Sounds interesting.librarypatnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-37602507509483034822010-05-28T06:57:45.724-04:002010-05-28T06:57:45.724-04:00Saranna--Sometimes, we're too close to our wor...Saranna--Sometimes, we're too close to our work to see the warts. When my stuff comes back after several months for revisions, I barely recognize it because enough time has elapsed for the problems to leap out a tme.<br /><br />FYI, my <a href="http://www.miamarlowe.com/bookshelf.htm" rel="nofollow">TOUCH OF A THIEF</a> is a historical paranormal, but it may not be enough paranormal to qualify for some readers. No vamps or were-creatures. My heroine has a psychometric gift (she receives visions when she touches gemstones) and there's a malevolent red diamond that's almost sentient (sort of like Tolkein's Ring)EmilyBryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03542349086762747179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-65853395421041708962010-05-28T00:38:03.543-04:002010-05-28T00:38:03.543-04:00@Emily-
Thanks again for having me back and as al...@Emily-<br /><br />Thanks again for having me back and as always, your advice helped me to produce a better product. <br /><br />I've gone back today and made changes and tightened not only what you pointed out, but other places that had the same problems.<br /><br />I'm still learning to trust my own voice and my inner editor. It's sad that I've been a freelance editor for ten years, but it's still like pulling rhinoceros teeth to razor my own work. <br /><br />Thanks to everyone else who commented for their feedback and encouraging words.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17774647553760700746noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-19222588410740804492010-05-28T00:34:42.660-04:002010-05-28T00:34:42.660-04:00@Nynke-
It's uncomfortable. I had an inmate ...@Nynke- <br /><br />It's uncomfortable. I had an inmate do it once and wow... I was not a happy camper. It's a surprise move to pull on a girl, so unexpected. <br /><br />The Covenites don't know they're bad, but that's all I'm going to say. I don't want to give away Samara's secrets. *g*<br /><br />It makes my day to know you want to know what happens to Samara.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17774647553760700746noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-26776740244108042322010-05-28T00:31:07.291-04:002010-05-28T00:31:07.291-04:00@Jane L- High praise, indeed. Now, *I'm* blush...@Jane L- High praise, indeed. Now, *I'm* blushing. Thank you. <br /><br />That used to be all I read too, but the paranormals hooked me. If I could find a paranormal historical, wow. Those always go on the Keeper Shelf.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17774647553760700746noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-43103582358097367512010-05-28T00:29:28.865-04:002010-05-28T00:29:28.865-04:00YAY, Emily for The End. Isn't that a magnifice...YAY, Emily for The End. Isn't that a magnificent feeling? I'm so excited for you.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17774647553760700746noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-16155300344773318822010-05-27T19:50:40.452-04:002010-05-27T19:50:40.452-04:00Nynke--I remember slipping once when I was riding ...Nynke--I remember slipping once when I was riding a boy's bike. A knee to the groin would hurt females too, but its not debilitating as it is for males.EmilyBryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03542349086762747179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-84334535151747973362010-05-27T19:48:52.211-04:002010-05-27T19:48:52.211-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.MiaMarlowehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18027069675291646955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-78940376596843493932010-05-27T17:01:41.581-04:002010-05-27T17:01:41.581-04:00Em, congrats on your 'the end'!
Saranna, ...Em, congrats on your 'the end'!<br /><br />Saranna, I definitely want to see where this story is going! It's interesting... and I really wonder how people who serve the Ark of the Covenant have ended up as bad guys! Maybe they're not really bad guys, if Samara doesn't want Glock lady hurt... And what will happen to Samara, now that she's wounded? you've really managed to place a great hook at the end of your 500 words!<br /><br />I haven't got a lot to add to Emily's comments, except that I figured the dead body was the victim, not Mayan-blade-guy. And I can see why Samara would smile, slightly viciously perhaps, before kneeing her attacker :). But thinking about it, how much does it hurt us ladies to get kneed in the groin? I don't think it's ever happened to me; am I naive in assuming it wouldn't really hurt very much?Nynkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08810044360681034104noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-18241942121224788712010-05-27T15:00:47.723-04:002010-05-27T15:00:47.723-04:00Jane--I agree and it's totally cool that this ...Jane--I agree and it's totally cool that this voice is so very different from her humorous paranormals. If Saranna were a singer, I'd say she had a wide range!EmilyBryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03542349086762747179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-58876963595560858002010-05-27T13:39:22.799-04:002010-05-27T13:39:22.799-04:00Saranna, Very good job! I usually only read histor...Saranna, Very good job! I usually only read historicals, but you did a great job of keeping me interested in wanted to continue reading on. I think that says alot for a writer to have the ability to pull someone from one genre into theirs! Hope to read the finished story some day!Jane Lnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-66070847752917891652010-05-27T12:50:08.527-04:002010-05-27T12:50:08.527-04:00Stop! I'm blushing!
I have to share that I ju...Stop! I'm blushing!<br /><br />I have to share that I just now typed "The End" on TOUCH OF A THIEF, my debut Mia Marlowe title for Kensington. <br /><br />Now I have to red pencil 397 pages of my own stuff!EmilyBryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03542349086762747179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-34556854991652515952010-05-27T11:52:41.490-04:002010-05-27T11:52:41.490-04:00Thanks, Maria! That's very encouraging. :)
Em...Thanks, Maria! That's very encouraging. :)<br /><br />Emily is brilliant, isn't she?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17774647553760700746noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-88521350076234128302010-05-27T11:35:23.895-04:002010-05-27T11:35:23.895-04:00I don't really have any suggestions for Sarann...I don't really have any suggestions for Saranna as the corrections that Emily has provided seem good to me. The story seems very interesting and I would certainly ilke to read more.Mariahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14610197634075184793noreply@blogger.com