tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post1466503957376852527..comments2024-03-12T21:24:23.240-04:00Comments on Emily Bryan Romance: Red Pencil Thursday with Christine DonovanEmilyBryanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03542349086762747179noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-70661025771260117382010-07-05T18:12:22.285-04:002010-07-05T18:12:22.285-04:00Gillian,
It is never too late for a party!
Thank ...Gillian,<br /><br />It is never too late for a party!<br />Thank you for your comments. I love good conflict as well and try to engage readers with it from the start. My duke will have conflict in spades with his herione, his two sisters and one brother.Christine Donovannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-19574314149877881422010-07-04T09:37:25.335-04:002010-07-04T09:37:25.335-04:00Hi Christine! Sorry I'm late to your party. :)...Hi Christine! Sorry I'm late to your party. :)<br /><br />I really like your intro as well! Others have offered good advice about the mechanics. I'd like to say that you've introduced all sorts of good conflict, conflict that could sustain a book. As a duke he's got all sorts of responsibilities, to the tenets on his lands as well as his family. That usually leads to all sorts of great trouble, in the form of the heroine. <br /><br />Congratulations on finishing so many books and good luck with Regency!Gillian Laynehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15772849187702478349noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-13459476481003718072010-07-03T18:44:51.286-04:002010-07-03T18:44:51.286-04:00Hi Christine,
I imagine it is nerve-wracking subm...Hi Christine,<br /><br />I imagine it is nerve-wracking submitting your work, but I hope your manuscripts eventually find homes.<br /><br />One thing I forgot to mention was that I liked what I saw of your villain, Charles Hamilton. He seemed to have a lot of potential for villainy and you made me curious as to why he was so keen to lose at cards to the duke.<br /><br />Have a great Fourth weekend!<br /><br />MaryMarynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-13837904066322838162010-07-03T11:13:14.403-04:002010-07-03T11:13:14.403-04:00Mary,
Thank you for all your helpful comments. Y...Mary,<br /><br />Thank you for all your helpful comments. Yes, I have finished 9 manuscripts, However, I'm not very good as submitting my work and that is something I'm trying to change. I try to remind myself everyday that If I don't submit, I can't get published. Good luck with your writing. I'll have to reconsider using two Duke's in the story.Christine Donovanhttp://christinemdonovan@comcast.netnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-13965970064147171992010-07-03T00:16:38.353-04:002010-07-03T00:16:38.353-04:00Mary, I personally avoid dukes most of the time be...Mary, I personally avoid dukes most of the time because they can't be addressed as 'my lord' or Lord Somesuch. It always has to be Your Grace, unless he's with intimate friends. Otherwise the title feels a bit clunky in short order. \<br /><br />However, I have used a duke for my hero in my online novella A DUKE FOR ALL SEASONS.EmilyBryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03542349086762747179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-14359432658591943542010-07-02T17:49:51.520-04:002010-07-02T17:49:51.520-04:00Hi Christine,
Wow. Nine completed manuscripts; I...Hi Christine,<br /><br />Wow. Nine completed manuscripts; I'm impressed. I just recently started work on my first; I'd be extremely happy to finish 9 manuscripts in 8 years.<br /><br />Regencies are my favorite type of romance to read, so I'm glad to see a Regency come up this week. Emily gave you great advice with regard to entailment laws and a gentleman's attitude toward his gambling debts. It was a huge point of honor among gentleman to pay their gambling debts.<br /><br />I agree with Emily about dropping more subtle hints about Hamilton's motives. I would also be less obvious about Demetrius' suspicions. In paragraph 2, I would think about leaving off the last sentence because you refer to his intuition later in the excerpt.<br /><br />One point of grammar: in paragraph 3, I believe you should say "He spoke calmly and directly..." I also thought there were a few missing commas. I can point those out if you want, but I didn't want to sound too nit-picky.<br /><br />Another thing to consider is that having 2 dukes in the story may be frowned upon. I am sure Emily is more knowledgeable about it, (and perhaps she'll weigh in). From what I've read on Regency related blogs, it's seems to be preferable to pick lesser titles. I guess it's because there were so few dukes in real life, it's frowned on to have too many in fiction. This is the impression I've gotten, at any rate.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing your work this week.Marynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-79175803724623533772010-07-01T18:01:16.261-04:002010-07-01T18:01:16.261-04:00My pleasure, Christine. I like the Duke of Wenwort...My pleasure, Christine. I like the Duke of Wenworth! That sounds like a place to me. <br /><br />I love your teachable attitude. It will take you far. We learn how to write by writing. Kudos to you for taking the plunge!EmilyBryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03542349086762747179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-11895689432762751222010-07-01T09:40:00.275-04:002010-07-01T09:40:00.275-04:00Emily,
Thanks for all your wonderful comments and...Emily,<br /><br />Thanks for all your wonderful comments and advice. As for the title, I like it also. Only changed it twice (which is a record for me)<br /><br />I must have changed the duke's title 20 times, but settled on the Duke of Wenworth. I was watching American Idol and borrowed Siobon (sp) Magnus's last name. There's comething electric about it. <br /><br />As far as your comment on "restore your holdings and lands, I need to make that more clear. Thanks.<br /><br />I have already eliminated the head hoping. But darn it all, I wanted to be Nora for a day!<br /><br />Since this is my first attempt at writing an historical I know I have much to still learn. I thank you from the bottom of my heart for your help in making, "The Reluctant Duke" better.<br /><br />ChristineChristine Donovanhttp://christinemdonovan@comcast.netnoreply@blogger.com