tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post6351093046056865918..comments2024-03-12T21:24:23.240-04:00Comments on Emily Bryan Romance: Red Pencil Thursday~ How to CritiqueEmilyBryanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03542349086762747179noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-38332979147862818222023-04-04T18:12:19.026-04:002023-04-04T18:12:19.026-04:00ua972 puma suede,passenger tøj,fjallraven sklep,gu...ua972 <a href="https://www.pumabrasil.net" rel="nofollow">puma suede</a>,<a href="https://www.passengerclothingdk.com" rel="nofollow">passenger tøj</a>,<a href="https://www.fjallravenkanken.pl" rel="nofollow">fjallraven sklep</a>,<a href="https://www.xn--guesscip-8sb.com" rel="nofollow">guess kabát</a>,<a href="https://www.filasouthafrica.net" rel="nofollow">fila south africa</a>,<a href="https://www.campersrbija.com" rel="nofollow">campersrbija</a>,<a href="https://www.filabulgaria.com" rel="nofollow">filabulgaria</a>,<a href="https://www.xn--5dbaaoohslkgidjx3d1b.com" rel="nofollow">בלנסטון ילדים</a>,<a href="https://www.pumacollegehousut.com" rel="nofollow">pumacollegehousut</a> ef128rowhibhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18395890894315178673noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-14300544498603865762010-10-22T16:45:48.694-04:002010-10-22T16:45:48.694-04:00Hi Emily!
critiquing with tact - that's hard ...Hi Emily!<br /><br />critiquing with tact - that's hard work. Kudos to everyone who does it!<br /><br />I really like the renewed opening; I think the action comes across a little clearer, and showing instead of telling (well, telling only a little) what the Knack is works well! I did catch a new typo though, I think: "from airless convict ship" needs "an", if I'm not mistaken.Nynkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08810044360681034104noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-7313919115241688032010-10-15T08:01:44.381-04:002010-10-15T08:01:44.381-04:00Thanks, Marcy! (In case the rest of you are wonder...Thanks, Marcy! (In case the rest of you are wondering, Marcy is my trusted Beta reader)MiaMarlowehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18027069675291646955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-59187293195545060692010-10-14T18:45:51.370-04:002010-10-14T18:45:51.370-04:00Emily, good fixes! I like the opening even better ...Emily, good fixes! I like the opening even better now :-).Marcy Wnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-64632390695656220052010-10-14T11:59:52.953-04:002010-10-14T11:59:52.953-04:00Yes it would but then I wouldn't have been cur...Yes it would but then I wouldn't have been curious enough to go to a dictionary or a thesaurus and look. Sometimes I like to be challenged! I like my authors to make me grow as a reader. So, knowing what I know now, and in context with the historical period, its probably a very good choice. Thank you for explaining that. <br /><br />NanNancyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01356237143516426764noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-3189195441862353122010-10-14T10:48:42.634-04:002010-10-14T10:48:42.634-04:00Ooops. My sentence wasn't clear. Only 5 crit p...Ooops. My sentence wasn't clear. Only 5 crit partners, 10 pages from each of us. <br /><br />I like to use words in unexpected ways, hence "loosed" as if he is loosing an arrow. Would "launched" work better than "loosed" for you, Nan?EmilyBryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03542349086762747179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3217012316587200736.post-35443028328982933342010-10-14T09:18:37.208-04:002010-10-14T09:18:37.208-04:00HI Emily,
First you are so brave to have 10 peop...HI Emily, <br /><br />First you are so brave to have 10 people look at it. I get queasy with more than one. I had a fantastic cp or critique partner who did not write my genre, had no clue of western historical work but read for story and grammar. Like your group she made my work 3D once her critique was done. Unfortunately, she's had to concentrate on her own growing career so now I'm searching for another. You have a sentence that bothers me. The one after your hero reached up toward the man's boot. You use the word "loosed" was that a type-o? It sort of leaps out at me. <br /><br />NanNancyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01356237143516426764noreply@blogger.com